Thursday, May 3, 2007

Outline I. Introduction A. Attention-getter 1. Is Myspace really just for you or is it everyone’s space to look at. 2. B. Preview main points 1. Is myspace safe for everyone or should there be limits and rules/ 2. What can experts do to limit the amount of sexual predators on myspace? 3. Are rules and certain standards necessary for myspace users? 4. Are your kids safe, at the house, school or other public Internet sources? C. Thesis statement 1. There are many things on the Internet that can endanger teens easily
II. Body A. Body paragraph #1 1. Topic sentence a. Myspace started in 2003 as a band connecting source, but then turned in to a friendly place for many different people.
2. Supporting details a. Information about myspace
b. codes d. different stories and reports that happened
e. ______________________________________________________________________ f. ______________________________________________________________________ B. Body paragraph #1 (second proof of your thesis statement) 1. Topic sentence a. _____________________________________________________________________ 2. Supporting details (proof of topic sentence; be specific with details and have enough information) a. ______________________________________________________________________ b. ______________________________________________________________________ c. ______________________________________________________________________ d. ______________________________________________________________________ e. ______________________________________________________________________ f. ______________________________________________________________________ C. Body paragraph #1 (third proof of your thesis statement) 1. Topic sentence a. _____________________________________________________________________ 2. Supporting details (proof of topic sentence; be specific with details and have enough information) a. ______________________________________________________________________ b. ______________________________________________________________________ c. ______________________________________________________________________ d. ______________________________________________________________________ e. ______________________________________________________________________ f. ______________________________________________________________________ III. Conclusion A. Re-state thesis 1. ________________________________________(Transition sentence goes here) B. Review main points 1. _______________________________________________________________________ 2. _______________________________________________________________________ 3. _______________________________________________________________________(Transition sentence goes here) C. Attention-"goer" (sometimes called the "clincher") 1. ____________________________________________

Tuesday, April 24, 2007

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Oliver Prichard
"Teens Find Freedom, Trouble with Myspace"
Knight Ridder Newspaper (KRT)

People across America are getting so swept up into myspace, they can adjust things, add things, delete things, take codes and other things they enjoy off other peoples pages, they are now allowing your choice of music and can add You Tube videos. You can pretty much call your house for a teenager; everything you know and put time into goes on that page. Because you spend so much time trying to get the best social life of having the best page or the cool new song, or even having the most friends can be a competition between friends. That leaves little or less time for schoolwork, family time, exercise, interacting with kids their own age, now days everything is done online, with the new Aim, and now myspace and face book for college students. Kids need to take a step out of the future where they can not do anything without doing online and take a break from all the danger that could be on any page you go onto.

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Janet Stanley
"Child abuse and the Internet "
Published By the Australian institute of Family Studies

Kids are exposed to things they shouldn't be seeing a lot over the teenage years of their life, but over half of them occur online. Teens are exposed and brought into the world where many parents do not want their kids to be. Because of this it is putting young vulnerable teens in positions they are not ready to handle yet. This can make it very easy for sexual predators to come and sweep them off their feet. They often try to talk teens into a relationship starting off as friends than slowly get more and more friendly with their victim, without them knowing what they are trying to do. Out of 501 surveyed 63% said they would rather be online that sitting and watching the television. Many young kids are learning things at earlier of earlier ages making the risk factors go up a lot in the danger online.

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The Blade
"Myspace a safer place;"
Pages of opinion, Newspaper
A company that does tracking on Myspace tells us that 12% of members on myspace are younger that 16, because this number is somewhat high it makes it very unsafe for vulnerable teens to meet new people and to act different of do what they see on other kids Myspace pages. Teens leave Chain messages posted in bulletins saying "add him he'll treat you right" and other words that could make any teen feel uncomfortable to be online. They pick on the young teens because they call them "easy targets" thinking that they do not know much better than not to talk to strange people online. That’s when talking to your parents about Internet safety kicks in. It is important to talk to you parents about what you’re doing online and letting them know if anything out of the normal keeps coming up. Kids in their young teens still do not know right from wrong very well, messing with people online can cause a lot of damage and trouble to kids parents and social works as in cops, judges etc. Parents need to explain to their children before letting them going out online.

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Alvin Chang
"Myspace tries blocking predators, but can safety measure work"?
Knight Ridder Tribune News Service

Myspace added safety features making profiles that are under the age of 18 blocked to anyone over 18, which lessens the amount of old men trying to prey on the young teens. But even that wouldn’t stop the pedophiles from seeking their goal; they would then just create another myspace claiming they were 14 so they were able to see all the myspaces that they wanted to without anyone knowing they were lying. Many teens are suing Myspace for being sexually assaulted by someone lying about his or her age, location, hometown, etc. Myspace should not be getting sued for anyone’s sexual harassment, people put it upon themselves it should be none else’s problem but their own for signing up to be a member. There is danger everyone in the world but online seems to be the hot spot. Where pedophiles can come a sweep the nation with their disgustingness that none wants around their children or friends.

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Eric Bloom
New Opportunities
"Danger Online"

There are many people out there trying to stop the danger of online predators. Teenagers should be able to feel safe while being online at their house school or anywhere else. There are cops and detectives out there trying to lure in the sexual predators just so they can get caught and have one less fright online. The argument of whether or not internet in school should be allowed, if it is pulled from the teens fingertips it would keep the safe from what parent and teachers can not keep them safe from. But keeping them from the Internet is on of the best way children learn; there is a lot of educational things and entertainment for everyone. Many sexual predators that are willing to go the mile to get what they want will often travel far distances just to get the chance to do what they want with teens today. Myspace is one of these spots, someone can add you and see that you like all the same stuff not know that the predator just recently made his to fit your personality to try to slowly attack you.

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Cathrine Sailiant
"Testing the Bounds of Myspace"
Los Angeles Times
April 8th 2006 pp. A 1 +

Myspace can give away a lot of personal information, many people take survys that ask a lot of personal questions for example: Have you ever taken drugs? Are you a virgin? Have you ever killed someone? These questions are not okay for young teenagers to already be seeing and answering. Kids quickly spread the word that they got a myspace and soon everyone of their friends' want one. Parents should closely watch their children, making sure they know what their doing on myspace to keep themselves out of danger. Many strange people on myspace are not who they always say they are which can lead teenagers into their trap where the sexual predators want them. If parents put strict rules and allow certain things and watch their kids on the internet will help protect a lot of young teenage girls today. Teens are using improper grammer which is corrupting their english writing. They start writing in slang in papers when they write on homework assingments etc. It also makes kids addicted always checking to see if they got new friend request, picture comment, or new comment, that can interurpt with their family time making them less social with their family.